is this a good poem?

[BlackPlayaz]

It's close to midnight and something evil's lurking in the dark
Under the moonlight, you see a sight that almost stops your heart
You try to scream but terror takes the sound before you make it
You start to freeze as horror looks you right between the eyes
You're paralyzed

??? is it a good poem?

[Chromosome]

Can be better, you should follow a rhyme scheme throughout the poem if you chose to rhyme.
Or else keep it a blank verse.
The idea is good but try to make people feel the emotion with your words.
Figures of speech would help quite a lot.

[Jefff]

Drop 'almost' in the second line

[Sienkronieze]

Um? Guys?


These are the opening lyrics of Thriller.

[Truth]

It's close to midnight and something evil's lurking in the dark
Under the moonlight, you see a sight that almost stops your heart
You try to scream but terror takes the sound before you make it
You start to freeze as horror looks you right between the eyes
You're paralyzed

??? is it a good poem?

Terrible poem; mediocre song.

[NaughtyBwoy]

Um? Guys?


These are the opening lyrics of Thriller.LMFAO!I think so too O.o